#3 After reading the art of quoting the part that helps you with introducing quotations. I always have trouble coming up with ways to bring in quotes but this example really helps clarify how and different ways to do so. I also like how we are taught to explain the quote we choose. It is important that the reader understands the quote because of its possible significance to your piece of writing. I think this is an important because if you can’t introduce quotes the right way so that they are affective then they are basically useless.
#4 The end of food paper explains the story of three young men and their journey to change the world. There are many drinks out there that are supposed to be able to replace meals. Protein shakes, ensures, etc… They believe that there so called “soylent” is better then all of them. The twenty five year old Rob Rhinehart is the one being interviewed. Rhinehart and his colleagues are very well educated men and spent hours on hours of research about their soylent. It has been enjoyed by many people and has proven it’s potential. The powdery substance has every nutrient needed to sustain a human being for along time or maybe forever according to Rhinehart. Rhinehart ins’t only a business man he really believes in his product to make a real difference. He talks about how cheap it is to make and all the good it could do like helping with the hungry and a stable source of energy for hospitalized patients.
This text changed my thinking because I’ve tried these sort of things before and never was impressed. In reality though I am always trying to gain weight and it can be hard to get the calories I need. Sometimes I miss meals and sometimes I just can’t eat enough. If this soylent is really as good and works as well as I’ve read it could really change the game for me, athletes, and anyone trying to gain some bulk everywhere. Popular business like GNC would either have to adopt it in their own stores or get compete with a tough product. I 100% would be willing to try it and I think a lot of other people would too.
#7 The global comments/suggestions I found the best from my peers were that I need to be more organized, have more quotes, and have more explanations. I had some choppy sentences that stopped the flow of the paper and makes it almost annoying to read. I also jump around with my ideas a lot making it very hard to follow along. I need more quotes to help strengthen my text and I need to explain my thoughts and text I already have in there. I have good ideas but without quotes to help back it up or to strengthen my argument they are pointless.
The best global comments/suggestions I offered to my peers is to get deeper. I tried to push them to really think about what they were writing and what they were saying. I wanted them to question themselves because that is what leads to meaningful and critical thinking which will provide some really strong and creative thoughts and ideas.
Important feedback and discussion points that weren’t captured on the page that came up during discussion, was our personal views on soylent. It was helpful to here some other views and perspectives from both Fiona and Davin. Fiona also helped me a lot by explainIng and showing me examples of how to make my essay have more flow so it’s easier to follow. Fiona’s paper exhibited that very well, her paper was very well organized and written.
I wish that instead of my peers just telling me what i did wrong, i wish they gave their own personal thoughts and ideas on how it could be better. After reading their essays I know that they could of provided a lot more feedback
#8 After reading “They say I say” I learned that there is essential advice that will help strengthen your argument and essay. Before you introduce your thoughts and ideas, it’s important to first add the opposing arguments take on the topic. There is different ways to approach what “they say.” One thing you can do is Make what “they say” something you say. You introduce their views and then treat them as your own by conceding a personal experience and converting it to side with your argument. This strategy is something I find myself trying to do as often as I can. I think it is a very strong way to help your argument. You involve both arguments and then turn their thoughts against them in a very persuasive way by using experiences.
#9 While I was revising I fixed some punctuation, grammar and word choice. I had to write in my page numbers because they were all the number two for some reason. There is always more to do and make better, but at this point I wouldn’t change much. I would try to add a couple more things from the text like quotes, if I had one more time to look through it. The drafting/revising process here is so much more different then I’m used to. It is much more organized and effective here, it really helps make the paper grow and the writer grow when you keep going back to the paper like we did. In High-school we would type it revise maybe once and then be done with it. I imagined this was what writing an essay in college would be like and especially for this class. It didn’t surprise me but it definitely opens my eyes and showed me how wrong I’ve been going about writing all these years.
#10 Page 3, Paragraph 2
In one passage it explains the importance of Julia Child’s legacy and how it affected and helped Julie Powell. In 1949 a woman knowing how to cook seemed pointless and no one expected it to ever lead anyone to success. However Julia Child’s legacy helped Julie Powell work in a world where food is taken seriously. This is a unique paragraph because it shows the important relationship between food and TV and how it changed so many lives and changed how we thought and lived. I agree with how this sculpted the path for these kinds of opportunities to come about for women. It allowed women to cook for celebrities, politics and many other people of importance. In a time where women were fighting for their rights this helped show them there strength and gave confidence to those who needed it. The amazing thing is that all of it was possible with food, and through tv or media.
Page 3, Paragraph 4
A very strange thing that is happening with these food shows is that people are so eager to watch chefs on tv to create the masterful dishes, but we never try to ourselves. We are content with watching how it could be done and how delicious the final product looks and we only imagine how good it would taste. Viewers have gotten so lazy that we won’t make these meals ourselves. Instead we get fast food or tv dinners or other meal replacements that have caused a tremendous decline in home cooked meals actually cooked in our own homes. Cooking to us has become an inconvenience and a waste of our time. For Julia and Julie: cooking was there lives, it was what helped them flourish and grow as individuals and icons. It was their lives to cook it was never thought of as a burden. It was there life’s work that ended up giving them literary success.
Page 5 Paragraph 2
There is a really cool paragraph where Julia is on her show and she is literally just flipping the a pancake. She is cooking by herself, at first she does it very timidly and is nervous she’s going to mess it up. She looks at the camera and very sternly gets a simple message across, who is going to see you. The answer is no one which means who cares if you screw up. In the paragraph she says “The only way you learn to flip things is just to flip them!” This means that you always can learn from a your mistakes and you don’t know what you’re capable of until you try. These are two very strong messages that are given in a funny light hearted metaphor. I completely agree with what she is saying and it is a really cool thing that she is doing. She is on a cooking show but is being a motivational speaker and leader to woman but really everyone that watches the show. The fact that she could take on that role is amazing, but she couldn’t of done it without the help of food.
#11 Reading “What’s Motivating this writer?” really shows you how important and how helpful it is to use certain. tips to strengthen your essay. The main point of the chapter is how to put your opinion or the reason your writing the paper, into your paper. An obvious first step is having a thesis, a couple of sentence explaining what the paper is and your take on the situation you’re writing about. You then have to add in other writer arguments even if it contradicts yours. This allows the reader to be apart of the discussion and experience other writers views. The most impressive thing to see is how much of a difference this makes. They gave a section of an essay from the “Growing College Gap” it was well written and had all of the necessary components and made it easy to see the what it was about and what the author thought while including you to be involved by asking questions. Later on they showed a much smaller portion go “Gender Trouble: Feminism and the Subversion of Identity.” It lacked all of a lot of the tools needed and it was very obvious, it was a wake up call because I never knew how much of a difference it made until I saw it being compared and contrasted.
#13 I had a lot more difficulty writing the second paper and it took a lot more thought because I couldn’t really use my own opinions or work. I had trouble connecting others work with each other because of how everybody opinions and experiences are so unique. Sometimes trying to connect the writing is hard because sometimes you really have to dig to find parts that help your argument. Everyones style of writing is different as well so that adversity always makes it a bit challenging. Using other peoples work to strengthen my claim is something I usually excel at when I can use real facts like a scientific paper. In this paper it was using a lot of others peoples opinions which made it a bit more difficult and pulled me away from my comfort zone. I definitely had to think about this paper much more and had to really try to figure out how to include key aspects of each paper to help strengthen mine in the right ways. It definitely was a good learning experience and I will definitely have to practice this skill. I struggled at first with explaining my quotes but after I went back a lot and think I really did a good job.
14# I still agree with everything I agreed in after our earlier readings and conversation. “Consider the Lobster” still proves a valid point about our morales as a society. I still agree that eating lobsters the way we do is wrong but now I have changed how strongly I believe that opinion. It is a difficult thing to process how we eat them but in nature animals kill each other more often then not in very gruesome ways. Wolves circling a deer until its tired and then eating and ripping it apart while its still alive is a very hard way to go. The only thing I would argue is that at least the deer has a chance unlike the captured lobsters. I think as a society we should care more about what we eat and just give a little more thought to it. Maybe a little less meat and more vegetables would help everyone. If we could just consider the lobster and all other creatures we eat a bit more it could make a big difference.
15# On page 3 there is a paragraph that starts with “some of my happiest childhood memories.” This paragraph talks about how food, more specifically meat, was connected with so many memories and experiences. The paragraph relates different meals and meat to different memories. Sushi lunch dates with mom and dad’s turkey burgers in the backyard. Foer had trouble trying to let these meats go because in a way he was letting go a little bit of these experiences. Foer did gain the ability to remember his own values and found new ways to connect himself with these memories. This paragraph is extremely accurate to our favorite meal essays in the sense that we share the same connections with food and family. I would agree with the struggle of letting certain foods go because of the deep connections they had with me and others. I also don’t know if I could give up meat just because it’s so good.
The truth is we do what we do to farm animals because its a massive industry that is a huge part of our economy. Agriculture reported that U.S. livestock sales accounted for 52 percent of the nation’s total market value of products. That’s more then half which shows how important this industry is to our economy and our nation. This is because we like how they taste and they go good with a lot of things in a ot of different ways. It’s a inhumane thing to do to another creature but we do it because every person on this planet works for an easier life. We invent and discover so things are more easily attainable. There is no justifiable reasoning besides the singular and sole purpose of personal gain. Individuals can feel bad about it, a lot of people are vegetarian because of it, but we consume meat for its accessibility and it’s taste. We are a selfish and greedy species.
